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A girl stubs busted toes
across cigarette sidewalks
and rippled parking lots,
shatters her music box,
her mother's dying swan,
to dance with vagaries
for the dawn of her city.

She dances violently
for every chaired cripple
and the politically corrected,
handicapped by society.

She weeps in corners
with the coroners who
uncover bodies under bridges,
every vagrant of her city.

She sets fire to roof tops
where falling stars nestle,
runs rusted fire escapes
that lead to dead end allies,
and turns over dumpsters,
raging for a way out.
:iconthirdim3nsion:
I had to wait for this one to materialize.

August 18, 2012
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A Dancing Girl by ~thirdim3nsion ( Suggested by *UnspecifiedUnknown and Featured by ^Beccalicious )
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*TouchedBy-AnAngel Oct 31, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I really love this. My favorite part is this here:

"A girl stubs busted toes
across cigarette sidewalks..."

Very, very well done!

+ fave
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~Sigma-Echo-Seven Oct 8, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
This is poetic perfection; the wait was worth it. Well done!
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:icondavidpoet30:
awesome and beautiful
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:iconvmenfangirl:
Beautiful and vivid :D :iconwuvplz::clap:
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:iconreycied:
I...really want to explain the myriad reasons I like this poem in a long, and well-thought-out critique...but I find I don't have the words.

It's beautiful. And thank you for writing it.
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:iconunspecifiedunknown:
so deserved. congrats =]
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:iconformyladyartemis:
~ForMyLadyArtemis Oct 7, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Wow. Just, wow. I don't even know what to say, it's very powerful.
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~nataroque Oct 7, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
Wow, the first stanza is something else. Your words are so very... I don't know... crisp, delcious, rich, lonely. And the second stanze as well, nothing needing changing. It's so wonderful, definately something I'll keep coming back to
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:iconnicholasgaunt:
that was excellent.
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~Disgaeagirl565 Oct 7, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
♥ ♥ ♥ ♥ ♥ ♥ ♥ ♥ ♥ ♥ ♥ ♥ ♥ ♥
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